My sucky love poem:P (edited)

Its been twelve years now since you've been together. Those beautiful years seemed to pass by too quickly.Every night since then, he sits and sighs deeply on the roof of a lonely, abandoned building. He looks to find your face in the stars and your voice in the wind. You picture him smiling at a memory of two in some quiet place, kissing as if the world was blind to your love.Finally getting up, he immediately skateboards to your house, pocketing something unrecognizable. You silently lay in your bed waiting for the avalanche of pebbles to hit your window. Tap, Tap, Tap, he's there with a poem for you. Then those heavenly lips read:
"Your chocolate brown eyes
drown me in a sweet sea of memories.
Your lips leave me
with the blissful smell of your lip gloss.
Your hair,
OH, your hair
those shimmering strands of silken ecstasy
the color of coffee at sunrise in
the paradise of your heart.
I'm faithfully yours and
you're faithfully mine.
So now I must say..."
You think " Is he going to say what i think he is gonna say?"
He says it, "Will You marry me?"
The box came out and fire works light the air with your name. It's your dream isn't it? Outside with your pajamas in the fall breeze, he kneels down with a rounded, lustrous diamond. It gleamed in the darkness. A tear dripped down your cheek as you stuttered,
"Y-Yes."
It was all that needed to be said. It was one word to explain all the love you wanted to express to him.
The fireworks died and he sat at the porch with you looking up at the stars. From behind you hear,
"Can you explain why he's here?"
"Oh, mom we're engaged. Until death do us part mommy."
The expression on her face was like the the million of cars on the highway, fast and furious.
Just the perfect touch.